(Dactylic Hexameter in Qualitative Meter)
© Paterika Hengreaves
Barbados/March 1, 2011
(Remember! A poem has both implicit and explicit meaning, and that
is the beauty of it all)
Soon as
the girl in her night gown closed door, climbed on the bedspread;
Clinging to window a bug in a
web cage; spider on soft lace;
Looking from skyline, tall poles
stuck deep, lighting the homestead,
Hot air blowing in! Spider in bedroom, crawling in Jane's space.
Swift as a hare from the hole, Jane made mad dash from the bedroom;
Grabbed on the doorknob, wrestling with dead bolt, breaking the hinged door;
Dashed for the flit-can, battling the web squid, sprays with a vroom-vroom;
Falling from cobweb, eight feet drop dead, sprawling on pine floor
Dustpan, long broom, water in blue pail, mop in her hand, Jean
Holds on to high hope; big thoughts: end wars; feast on the peace pie;
Spraying and killing the heart and the body and spirit of earth's green;
Stop the abuse, on the earth's face, wink, wink, powers with false eye.
Swift as a hare from the hole, Jane made mad dash from the bedroom;
Grabbed on the doorknob, wrestling with dead bolt, breaking the hinged door;
Dashed for the flit-can, battling the web squid, sprays with a vroom-vroom;
Falling from cobweb, eight feet drop dead, sprawling on pine floor
Dustpan, long broom, water in blue pail, mop in her hand, Jean
Holds on to high hope; big thoughts: end wars; feast on the peace pie;
Spraying and killing the heart and the body and spirit of earth's green;
Stop the abuse, on the earth's face, wink, wink, powers with false eye.
© Paterika Hengreaves
Barbados/March 1, 2011
Interesting. I am going to have to reasd this a few times as I feel I am missing something.
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Haunting, mystical and beautifully crafted. You are a poet and wordsmith extraordinaire.
ReplyDeleteYour poem is so charming and striking all at once. I get something deeper going on than just the girl vs spider, though that is arresting enough. Your use of dactylic meter is remarkable.
ReplyDeleteThank you jobey-george your comment on this poem is greatly appreciated.Yes indeed, implicit and explicit meaning can be used in this poem.
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