faces of people in the crowd. The couplet of this Shakespearean sonnet
introduces an unexpected sharp thematic or imagistic "turn".
The rhyme scheme is abab cdcd efef gg. The tone is pensive and slow.
Today, I am feeling a little low,
I find it very hard to sleep and rest;
And penned this poem with beats that are slow;
Surely, it is not the amateur's best!
Poems you know do have a unique way,
Of freeing the mind from the enclosed box,
Such creativity is on display;
So one behaves like a crafty old fox.
What sadness do we see on faces here?
He is gone, so too is his shaven face.
Silver buckles no longer shine, my dear;
From the earth too are his footsteps and pace.
He parades in the celestial sky;
So he had to say this final goodbye.
©Paterika Hengreaves
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Kia ora Paterika,
ReplyDeleteSometimes I feel as if this is how I see life, it has a very black and white photo feel to it for me. Very much enjoyed your reading of it as well. Kia ora and look forward to learning a bit about poetry. Have a great day.
Ka kite ano,
Robb
We all feel a bit low at times and I found solace in this poem. I loved the lines
ReplyDeleteOf freeing the mind from the enclosed box,
Yes, we have to step outside of boxes. I often feel it is the chains that bind our minds that restricts us, not the chains that bind our bodies.
Keep on writing. I enjoy visiting your blog.
Ni sa moce (Fijian)
Bob